I love the way Craig Johnson describes an old bullet wound on the main character, in Book 1 of “The Cold Dish: A Walt Longmire Mysteries.” (Commissions earned from links.)
This description comes from the first book in the series that forms the basis for Longmire, the hit Netflix show.
But back to the description, it’s the perfect length. Concise and compact. Detailed and specific. And described well enough that you can almost feel the bullet rip through your skin.
Here’s Johnson’s description:
“I turned the water on in the shower and spent the time waiting for it to heat up by inspecting my bullet holes. I had four: one in the left arm, one in the right leg, and two in the chest. I looked at the one in my left arm since it was the closest. It was 357/1000ths of an inch with two clean, marbled white dots on either side. The one on the inside had well-defined edges and was about the size of a dime. On the other side it was blurred, had a tail like a tadpole that had drifted back to my elbow, and was about the size of a silver dollar.”
And then Johnson describes the incident brilliantly:
“It was a monkey-shit brown Olds Delta 88 with two hubcaps and a peeling, blond vinyl top. I could see they were kids and just flipped the lights on for a second so they would pull over. It took what seemed like a little too long for them to do it. The driver threw open the door and started back toward the car I was using at the time; I figured he was upset because I had pulled him over for what seemed like nothing. I was wrong. He was upset because he and his friend had robbed a liquor store in Casper and had gotten away with $943 when I stopped them en route to Canada. …
“Near as we could figure, the bullet must have ricocheted off the window facing of the car and passed through my left arm. People always ask what it’s like, and the only answer I can come up with is that it’s like having a red-hot poker shoved into your flesh. It burns, and it hurts like hell, but only after. I wondered mildly if Vonnie would think that bullet holes are sexy. Martha didn’t; she hated them.”
Hope you enjoyed that as much as I did the first time I read it.
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